Fantasy story follow-up (Whimsical “Weekend” #13)

 Yo.

It’s been more than half a year since I first talked about that one fantasy harem series (Cinq du Soleil) that I’ve been working on in my spare time. And somehow, over the past week or so, it’s been on my mind more than anything else I’ve been doing lately.

I mean, I said at one point that I wasn’t going to do a follow-up until I finished the story, but that was before I realized a vital limitation of Google Docs: As the number of pages in a document increases beyond 100, the document also becomes increasingly laggy. I went up to Chapter 7 (if I recall correctly) on a single document, but it was when I finally got fed up with the lag that I decided to start splitting the chapters into groups to be placed in separate documents. That is to say, the document I linked in the first post now only contains introductory content and Chapters 1-5, and I also have a document for Chapters 6-9 (simple but obligatory joke intended) and a to-be-determined set of chapters from 10.

Introductory content + Chapters 1-5

Chapters 6-9

I don’t have as much to say at this point as I did in the introductory post, but…

  • Since completing Chapter 1, I’ve had the tendency to end chapters only when the main characters sleep. I’ve also desired to add more concepts and characters to the story, which basically led to the later chapters getting longer. To put that into perspective, the first document is 87 pages long, while the second document is 101 pages long.
    • Heck, when I first wrote Chapter 9, I went all out on it. I recall Chapters 6-9 collectively being over 110 pages excluding interludes, and Chapter 9 alone accounted for a whopping 42 of those pages. It didn’t take long for me to split the chapter into two pieces: the first one (Chapter 9) being 25 pages, and the second (Chapter 10) being 17 pages.
  • I decided to add an “Interlude” section to the end of every chapter. This idea came about when I realized, before the information updates of Chapter 2, that there was a short aside conversation between Yue and Toru (which was, at the time, the first three lines of the current interlude of that chapter), and I hadn’t really considered making a similar thing for other chapters. Only sometimes (like the case of the interlude before I implemented interludes) do the interludes clarify otherwise unknown or incomprehensible aspects of the plot, but others of times they’re just purely for the heck of it.
  • In a similar vein to the “Information updates” sections, I recently decided that I would initiate later chapter documents with earlier chapter summaries (for instance, the 6-9 document has a summary for Chapters 1-5).
  • The next point is not only a spoiler of Cinq du Soleil Chapter 5, but also of Volume 12 of the Mondaiji light novel, so I shall hide it with white text in brackets. Highlight at your own risk. [In Cinq du Soleil, I included a plot twist that Dealer is Yue’s thought-to-be-dead sister (Diana Panishi). In the Mondaiji light novel, it is revealed that the character Faceless is Asuka’s thought-to-be-dead sister (Ayato Kudō). (I mean, Faceless isn’t portrayed as masculine, but that’s beside the point.) The thing is, though, I wrote that Dealer was Yue’s sister before I read that Faceless was Asuka’s sister, even though Mondaiji Volume 12 was published before I even started Cinq du Soleil. Coincidence? I think so.]
  • Dealer’s Treasure name was changed from “Trump” to “Lucky Draw”, to avoid confusion with the current President of the United States. I came up with the initial name more than two years ago, but it wasn’t until recently that I decided to change the name.
  • I had to make another shoutout to good ol’ Kili Surtr Muspelheim. In Chapter 7, Will, the Chief Elemental of Spirit, performs magic attacks by snapping his fingers, like how Kili does in the Fafnir anime.
  • I might have to say that Chapter 8 has been the hardest to write so far, particularly the beach visit and the aftermath thereof. It might be because I’m the type to care more about game-like concepts and plot points than how the characters interact from a casual standpoint.
  • It’s never like I’m totally finished with the chapters I’ve already done. Sometimes I can’t help scrutinizing my metaphorical footprints and, if something seems even a bit off, correct it accordingly.

I think that’s all I have to say for now. I’ve definitely been having fun with this story as I intended to, even if I struggle to find inspiration from time to time. As for the next set of chapters, I’ve gone up to 12 and done a tiny bit of 13 (currently on page 63 of the next document), although I’m thinking there are a few revisions to be made there, and I can’t make any promises regarding how close exactly I am to declaring that set as completed.

Speaking of not making promises, I wonder how long I’ll continue the story as a whole…

 À la prochaine! (Until next time!)

Spontaneous Saturday 11/7/15: My own fantasy story

Even though I have no desire to take up writing as a profession, I have a secret hobby of writing fantasy stories. It’s been a thing since…well, as long as I can remember, honestly. These stories, much like this blog, are a great outlet for me to dump my thoughts, so they mostly draw inspiration from video games, anime, or other media that I consume.

Right now, I am working on one in particular, titled Cinq du Soleil, which is a sort of pervy fantasy harem story with magical elements. I can’t guarantee it’s good, though, because I’m hard on myself because, again, I’m not a professional writer, and I’ve been single my whole life (which I feel says something about my perception of women). That said, if you wish to see my progress on this story (which you might even catch me editing), click the link below:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1eJB_L3JOYaCPpSF2iJjvZjZuPi3i5yc1ifD7N1UynVs/edit?usp=sharing

The rest of this post will explain in detail any background information surrounding the creation of this story; i.e., the untitled precursor concept (for lack of a better term) and any other inspirations and/or explanations behind my ideas.

Precursor

The precursor to this story used to be kept on a text document titled “Brainstorming lewd crud” that is no longer in my possession today, so chances are I may not remember everything about it.

Chiefly inspired by the anime Trinity Seven, the original idea involved two male protagonists and five female (making seven total). The male protagonists were Toru Koroi and Ao Mirakane (the latter of whom is now an antagonist), and the five females were about the same as they are, except Sumire’s last name was Dajira before I changed it to Miyazaki, and Yue Panishi used to be named Panishi Yuu.

Another similarity between the precursor and the original is that it involved five antagonists, granted there are some slight inconsistencies—in Ao’s place was a glasses girl (like Panishi) named Nao some-last-name-I-can’t-remember, Midori’s last name used to be Bolt, and in Dealer’s place was a similar character named Xenon (who was supposed to be female with an alter ego named Sena). Also, I was considering making the L’Ouverture character’s first name Toussaint (with a different last name, of course), but I had no idea how to write that in katakana at the time, and it didn’t occur to me back then to just check the Japanese version of the Wikipedia article of Toussaint L’Ouverture. (I like to provide Japanese writings of most of the names just because.)

Their weapons, however, were somewhat different from how they are now. The glasses worn by the likes of Toru and Panishi used to fire artillery (bullets, missiles, etc.) as opposed to their current purpose of facilitating the use of magic. In addition:

  • Aka’s sword, Picante, used to be named Taki, a random name that also serves as an inversion of Ao’s old sword name, Kita.
  • Sumire used to have a toy hammer (sort of like that of Amy Rose) named DajiPiko, which was a questionable idea in my mind.
  • Kaori’s dual arm blades, Aigu and Grave, used to be Wind and Earth, respectively, before they were converted to pure Wind in light of a radical change in lore explained later.
  • Midori’s swords had a different name, but I don’t remember what.
  • Xenon… I don’t even know if she even had a weapon.

The characters’ specials were different as well. Sumire’s was some sort of threefold attack (of which I can’t remember the name), Panishi’s was a mass firing of weapons (named Heavy Artillery in the precursor, even adapted to Open Fire in the current rendition before it was replaced with Metal Bind), and Mona’s was a love-based attack (of which I can’t remember the name) that dealt heavy damage to non-allies.

Besides that, the whole thing about elements and spells and Chief Elementals and whatnot was not in the precursor. Instead, the precursor was centered around a bunch of monsters (summoned by Neguro L’Ouverture) that were named using corrupted spellings of French animal/monster names from A to Z, and those whose names were closer to Z were more powerful.

I guess that’s all I have to say about the precursor, except that it wasn’t really a fleshed-out story, just a bunch of “Bits and Pieces,” as I like to call them.

Inspirations/Explanations

  • Again, the anime Trinity Seven is the chief inspiration of this story. During the season it was airing, I thought for some reason, “Hey, this inspires me to create my own harem story! I’ll even put seven main characters in it!” Thus, the precursor was conceptualized. (That said, if you are reading this section before or while reading Cinq du Soleil, do not expect the male lead to be much like Arata.)
  • The male protagonist duo, as it was in the precursor, was modeled after Tiz and Ringabel in the game Bravely Default.
  • Sumire’s first name and appearance (and, to some degree, her personality) are inspired by Sumire Saitou, one of my favorite characters of all time, from the manga K-On! Highschool.
  • The name Panishi is a romanization of how a Japanese person would say the English word “punish,” hence her punitive behavior at times. Her precursor name (Panishi Yuu) is supposed to sound like “punish you,” but her current name (Yue Panishi) is a bit more subtle.
  • The names Aka, Ao, and Midori are based on Japanese color names: red, blue, and green, respectively.
  • Aka’s last name (Fujiyama) meaning “Mt. Fuji” is pure coincidence, I promise. I didn’t intend anything by it; it just came off the top of my head.
  • Aka’s sword name, Picante, is Spanish for “spicy,” as a contrast to Ao’s sword name, Gelato, which is Italian for “frozen.”
  • Kaori’s last name (Delacroix) comes from that of Eugène Delacroix, which was to me (at the time) just some random name I learned about in 10th grade history. Also, my intention with her was to make her a French speaker, so I had to come up with something French.
  • Kaori herself is modeled after Claire Rouge from the anime Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance, and the male lead encounters her in a similar situation (especially so in the precursor, but Kaori’s response to the situation is slightly altered in the current rendition).
  • Kaori’s dual arm blades are supposed to resemble those seen in RWBY Volume 2 Episode 12. Their names, Aigu and Grave, are based on the French names of upward and downward accents, respectively. Moreover, Kaori’s special, Circonflex, is based on the accent that is effectively a combination of the two.
  • Mona Koroi is modeled after the titular character of the manga Cyclops Shoujo Saipuu in terms of her brocon nature and relatively large size.
  • Oda Koroi is named after Oda Nobunaga.
  • Nao, who was in the precursor but not in the current rendition, was based on the character Nao Okuda from K-On! Highschool. Thus, she was intended to be associated with Sumire.
  • Midori’s weapons, Sativa and Sativus, are named after the feminine and masculine forms (respectively) of a Latin botanical adjective meaning cultivated.
  • Neguro’s last name, L’Ouverture, comes from that of Toussaint L’Ouverture. (His dark skin is also part of this connection.) In a similar vein to Delacroix, this name is used as a random French name to signify that he is a French speaker.
  • The whole thing in the precursor about one of the antagonists (Xenon) having an alter ego (Sena) was chiefly inspired by Kili Surtr Muspelheim from the anime Juuou Mujin no Fafnir, who became a wolf in sheep’s clothing by the second half of the anime, when she was disguised as Honoka Tachikawa.
  • The name Tudi (given to the chief elemental of Water) is honestly a name for lack of a better name: a random name that vaguely sounds like “too deep.”
  • Créé is French for “created,” which is based on how the character Créé is artificial.
  • As for the title…I’ll describe it using the words of Kaori Delacroix in the story:
    “‘Cinq’ means ‘five,’ which is meant to symbolize that there are five of us girls who each use one element of the Soleil spectrum, of which there are five total. It is also a play on the term ‘Cirque du Soleil,’ which delivers the message that we can put on quite a show. … The ‘five’ part of the name only refers to me, Sumire, Yue, Aka, and Mona.”

I guess that’s it, maybe even too much. Perhaps I may have forgotten something. I will update the post if so.

 

Nowi Wins À la prochaine! (Until next time!)